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Post by Stormy on Aug 19, 2011 18:23:37 GMT -5
We're waiting on Rain's writer's block to go away. So a ghost huh? That explains why my pocket knife went missing over 3 years ago XP
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Post by Rain on Aug 19, 2011 19:36:46 GMT -5
I'M URGING IT TO GO AWAY, BUT IT ISN'T WORKING. Okay, I'll attempt to write something, and if it fails, which it probably will, I'll have you guys look at it and tell me what you want to change, m'kay? M'kay. Here goes. *rubs hands together and gets to writing* WAIT, I have to eat first. *goes to eat before writing*
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Post by Stormy on Aug 19, 2011 19:40:29 GMT -5
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Post by Rain on Aug 19, 2011 20:47:18 GMT -5
I'M SORRY. I'm not a pig, I was just hungry, okay? Writing now, sheesh.
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Post by Rain on Aug 19, 2011 21:07:02 GMT -5
“Find them,” Ivenna said venomously. “Bring them to me.” She titled my chin up, forcing me to look into her deep, dark eyes. I swallowed thickly and blinked. “Why are you after them?” I’d grown tired of her frequent demands. It’d been slavery. She continued to stare at me, eyes wide and malicious. “Why am I after them?” she whispered. She dropped my chin and spun around. “Why am I after them?!” she gave an airy, high-pitched cackle, and the other Wolf Riders followed suit. I merely rolled my eyes. She turned to look at me sharply. “You very well know why I’m after them. They’re evil; demonic.” Hah, as if. If anything, she was the evil one, taking lives and reigning terror over North of North. “You haven’t answered my question,” I challenged, balling my hands into fists. With this, Ivenna stepped closer to me, trying to look intimidating. But I wasn’t afraid of her anymore. She sneered. “Sara and her petty little creature don’t know how to run a town. The people, the animals-” A look of disgust lingered on her face for a moment. “Such a poor, poor way to take advantage of things.” - Sorry, but this was the only thing I could come up with at the moment. I don't know how to, so to say, transition it to where he/she ditches being a Wolf Rider and whether or not someone will be there to see it 'n stuff. Thoughts? Anything to add? Seriously, guys, help me.
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Post by Stormy on Aug 19, 2011 22:41:47 GMT -5
Hmm, first of all may I say your writing is fantastic, but I'm afraid it doesn't get the story across :/ Erm, what about a story-book kind of opening? Sounds dumb, I know, but it would get out the plot for those wanting to join, then we could have a small prologue like this one? We just have to wright it not to sound cheesy. What do you guys think?
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Post by Rain on Aug 20, 2011 13:02:34 GMT -5
I know it really doesn't get the story across - that's what I've been struggling with. I shouldn't have asked to write the prologue. Thanks for the compliment, but honestly, I don't think I'm that good a writer. I'm not asking for a pity party; that's just how I feel. Anyways, for the storybook-esque type prologue, you mean to begin with, "Once upon a time" or something like that?
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Post by Stormy on Aug 20, 2011 13:05:16 GMT -5
Along those lines yes, but without the "Once Upon A Time" at the beginning. Maybe something written kind of like that, but without sounding cheesy. Then we could have your prologue, but if we do have it, it needs to have the other riders in it... And don't you dare insult your writing again, it is wonderful, way better than mine.
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Post by ponyiowa on Aug 21, 2011 20:14:26 GMT -5
Yes, good idea Stormy and Rain. Rain, your writing is good. Period.
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Post by illinoisgal on Aug 22, 2011 18:56:27 GMT -5
Can I be in the new mps?
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Post by Stormy on Aug 22, 2011 18:59:07 GMT -5
Sure! Hey guys, do you think we should follow along some of the same lines of Starry's RPG? Like we have to have proper grammar and punctuation? I think it could be a good idea.
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Post by Rain on Aug 22, 2011 20:17:31 GMT -5
Everyone should use proper grammar and spelling regardless. We shouldn't have to put up a rule for it; it should already be known. I mean, if you're going to engage in an MPS/RPG, which requires writing, well, duh. A few typos here and there are okay, but something like, "oh, i dont capetalize my sentincez && am horrable @ speling but i guess ill juste join in thise game thingy dat requriez a LOT of wrighting and typeing & blahh-" Er, that took forever to type. I had to come up with legit typos and failed grammar, which is tough to do for me. No offense to anyone who isn't that good a speller and would like to join, it's just that I think the majority of us members should already know how to spell well. I'm not talking big, sophisticated words, I'm just saying that there's no harm in trying, y'know? Okay, I'm done ranting.
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Post by Stormy on Aug 22, 2011 22:13:23 GMT -5
EXACTLY! What irks me the most has to be when people do this "When are you going to be home ??" When they put a freaking space between the question mark(s)! But anyways, that's why I don't like my phone a lot, I hate texting people because I have proper spelling and stuff and they're like "ya I knw . thats wht i thnk 2" GAH! Sorry, but I feel like our country has failed to teach proper writing, and sometimes, sadly, just teach in general. : / Even though I know I mess up sometimes, at least I TRY to be good at it...... Wow, this post sounds REALLY offensive... I mean no offense, I honestly don't, but correct spelling, grammar, etc, is a good habit to have.
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Post by ponyiowa on Aug 22, 2011 22:21:44 GMT -5
Yeah guys, I agree! ;D For the most part I am a pretty good speller and sometimes it annoys me when I read fanfics on ff.net and there are typos all over the place like "'Can you come to my house??' He said.'" And if I'm going over illinoisgal's stories or what KodochaFan55 puts into the story that we're writing together, it's all I can do to keep grabbing the computer insanely and fixing all the typos. And sure, illinoisgal, you can join! ;D
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Post by Rain on Aug 22, 2011 22:58:09 GMT -5
Oh, I know. Once I see a bunch of typos in a story, or spaced out puncuation, or anything illiterate in a story, I blow up and just ditch it. All stories have typos, yeah, and I don't abandon those ones, but the ones that just... seem good at first but fail in the end with bunched up typos and all that, I leave. Like: "Oh well, yea" She said, smiling . GAH NO NO NO. Okay, promise I'm done. Unless you guys rant too, then I'm bound to continue. ;D
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